When he was gone, no
light
then dimmed; he was
dark
where there was darkness,
when there was silence, and
nothing
in what was everything
When he was gone, no
light
then dimmed; he was
dark
where there was darkness,
when there was silence, and
nothing
in what was everything
A bit quizzical, this one.
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How so
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First off it’s very minimalist, so it takes some filling in the gaps by the reader.
Then some details:
“When he was gone, no // light // then dimmed” here, how can something be dimmed __after__ the light is gone? Wait, does that mean it’s actually getting __brighter__? Dimmed is brighter than no light. I was assuming it was getting darker. Maybe it’s just a backwards assumption. Or maybe you mean “then” as in “back then”, not “next in sequence of events”.
Actually, a second read through, less glossing over it, it sounds much more stable and I understand it better now. Me no Engliski :3
It’s just very abstract, as well, which works.
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He has no light. So when he was gone, there was none to dim
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Okay.
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beautiful, hunny buns
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Thank you, Miss Chan
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😚
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